Tuesday, 4 March 2014

Woman's hockey

In 2014 Sochi winter Olympics people said that women`s hockey should not be in the Olympics because the balance between Canadian teams and USA were unfair to the rest of the teams that played women`s hockey. The International Ice Hockey Federation president Rene Fasel on Tuesday said that they were guaranteed women's hockey would not be taken out of the Olympics for 2018.The NHL commissioner Gary Bettmanwas talking to President Rene Fasel about taking hockey out and it would be "distressed" if it did happen. Gary refuses to talk about NHL players playing in the 2018 winter Olympics in South Korea. The NHL hired former WNBA president Val Ackerman as a consultant to look into the women's professional league. One other reason why they are thinking of taking Women’s hockey out of Winter Olympics in 2018 is because when Canada played Slovakia they won 17-0. I say that if there was going to be women’s hockey in 2018 other teams then Canada and USA has to be stronger so they will not be a blowout 17-0 again. If this does happen in the 2018 winter Olympics they should take women’s hockey out and wait till other teams are more developed. In Canada we have 80,000 girls playing, and in Finland they have maybe 4,000 or 4,500 playing hockey, and maybe 2,000 in Sweden and in Switzerland.
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3 comments:

  1. jessie.c14 April 2014 at 21:44

    Tyler,

    This post is very detailed, however it would be better if there was a summary at the end to state your points within the post.

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    1. Ms Lees14 April 2014 at 22:14

      Jessie - can you give some specifics to help Tyler improve. For example - which details did you find helpful or interesting as a reader and why? How might you start a concluding summary statement to wrap up this post. You may wish to review Austin's Butterfly to see how specific the comments are. Remember to do as Ms Snodden said earlier this year PEE for your paragraphs (Point, example/evidence, explain) or craft them as SEXI (state point, EXplain it, Illustrate with an example).
      Perhaps you can add another comment to offer more feedback.

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  2. Ms Lees14 April 2014 at 22:17

    See me at flex Tyler on Wed - I want to go over your post with you and offer some suggestions to improve.

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